LS62/Let's have a break 8

LS62/Let's have a break 8
Message de here4u posté le 12-05-2024 à 12:29:15 (S | E | F)
Hello dears,

This is an easy exercise that everyone can do.

Toujours en pause sur l’ exercice d’EXPRESSION Let's Suggest tel qu’il était…
C'est à nouveau la " nouvelle formule ", surtout que les vacances reviennent... JE SAIS, JE CROIS que vous pouvez être beaucoup plus nombreux à essayer d'aider tout le monde par vos travaux et vos corrections.

Certains m’ont dit être gênés d’exprimer des idées personnelles (surtout qu’ils avaient l’impression – souvent fausse – de les exprimer maladroitement.) Cependant, je ne vous demande pas de " raconter votre vie " si vous ne le désirez pas... Je souhaite juste vous voir vous exprimer sur tout sujet aussi " librement " que possible.
De plus, je pense que vous aurez maintenant compris que pour moi, toute expression, même maladroite, est intéressante et a de la valeur. Elle nous stimule tous à " trouver mieux " !

Voici les questions auxquelles vous devrez répondre en utilisant un comparatif par réponse. (court ou long - supériorité, égalité ou infériorité au choix !

1. Are books still useful nowadays?

2. People no longer know how to write.

3. Are smells important and a source of inspiration for you?

4. What are our dreams made of ?

Vous pouvez choisir 1 ou 2 questions au choix – en notant bien les références - et développer celle(s) que vous voulez jusqu’à atteindre en tout un maximum d’environ 130-150 mots.

Envoyez-moi vos réponses en mp et je publierai une série que vous 'corrigerez' (en bleu d’abord pendant deux jours) puis en vert… et je publierai ensuite la deuxième série... (sans changements donc ! ) Vous gagnez de la liberté (celle de ne pas parler d'un ou plusieurs sujets, ceux qui ne vous " inspirent pas "... Vous écrivez la longueur que vous voulez, vous pouvez choisir d'inventer, de plaisanter, ou de répondre avec sérieux... Nous vous suivrons !

Cet exercice sera pour vous un ou en fonction de la qualité de vos écrits et des difficultés (surmontées) dans la prestation...
Cet exercice sera corrigé le lundi 27 mai 2024 ! Go for it! with THE FORCE.

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Réponse : LS62/Let's have a break 8 de here4u, postée le 14-05-2024 à 11:30:00 (S | E)
Hello dears!

a lot for our first worker who sent us these anwsers to work on...

ANSWERS A: Please indicate possible errors and underline what you think is clumsy and could be improved...

TOPIC2: People no longer know how to write.
It's true that people write LESS AND LESS.
Young people don't even know how to hold a pen any more. They only communicate by phone or SMS and text message and write with abbreviations and acronyms.
As well as having become lazy at writing, the few letters they send are full of spelling mistakes.63 WORDS


TOPIC3: Are smells are important?
Yes, smells are important to me. I like good fruit and flower fragrances, MORE THAN than musty smells. Smells evoke memories: encounters, events. A smell can be attached to a place or a person.
That's why psychoanalysts use smells.
Personally, I can't say whether smells are a source of inspiration. However, I always scent my home and household linen. Every morning, I spray on my eau de parfum after washing. It makes me feel good. (80 words)

for your help!

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Réponse : LS62/Let's have a break 8 de happynutmeg13, postée le 14-05-2024 à 14:20:56 (S | E)
Hello ! Thank you for the new exercise !

ANSWERS A: Please indicate possible errors and underline what you think is clumsy and could be improved...

I can't find a lot to be changed...
Here are my indications though : for topic 2, I'd suggest to add some vocabulary that would make things less dogmatic, especially concerning young people. I cannot imagine that the author thinks their text refers to all of them ?

TOPIC2: People no longer know how to write.
It's true that people write LESS AND LESS.
Young people don't even know how to hold a pen any more. They only communicate by phone or SMS and text message and write with abbreviations and acronyms.
As well as having become lazy at writing, the few letters they send* are full of spelling mistakes.63 WORDS

* en français on dirait "anacoluthe", en anglais "syntactic break" ?

TOPIC3: Are smells are important?
Yes, smells are important to me. I like good fruit and flower fragrances, MORE THAN than musty smells. Smells evoke memories: encounters, events. A smell can be attached to a place or a person.
That's why psychoanalysts use smells.
Personally, I can't say whether smells are a source of inspiration. However, I always scent my home and household linen. Every morning, I spray on my eau de parfum after washing. It makes me feel good. (80 words)

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Réponse : LS62/Let's have a break 8 de gerold, postée le 14-05-2024 à 15:07:32 (S | E)
Hello here4U, and

ANSWERS A: Please indicate possible errors and underline what you think is clumsy and could be improved...

I can't find a lot to be changed...
Here are my indications though : for topic 2, I'd suggest to add some vocabulary that would make things less dogmatic, especially concerning young people. I cannot imagine that the author thinks their text refers to all of them ?

TOPIC2: People no longer know how to write.
It's true that people write LESS AND LESS.
Young people don't even know how to hold a pen any more. They only communicate by phone or SMS and text message and write with abbreviations and acronyms.
As well as having become lazy at writing, the few letters they send* are full of spelling mistakes.63 WORDS

* en français on dirait "anacoluthe", en anglais "syntactic break" ? I agree

TOPIC3: Are smells are important?
Yes, smells are important to me. I like good fruit and flower fragrances, MORE THAN than musty smells. Smells evoke memories: encounters, events. A smell can be attached to a place or a person.
That's why psychoanalysts use smells.
Personally, I can't say whether smells are a source of inspiration. However, I always scent my home and household linen. Every morning, I spray on my eau de parfum after washing. It makes me feel good. (80 words)

I am not sure "scent" is right here:

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Modifié par gerold le 14-05-2024 15:18

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Réponse : LS62/Let's have a break 8 de here4u, postée le 18-05-2024 à 11:31:37 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Green allowed, and required ...

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Réponse : LS62/Let's have a break 8 de happynutmeg13, postée le 21-05-2024 à 18:47:32 (S | E)
Hello !

Here are my suggestions :

J'ai tenu compte des remarques de Gerold, mais je ne sais pas si j'ai corrigé correctement

ANSWERS A: Please indicate possible errors and underline what you think is clumsy and could be improved...

I can't find a lot to be changed...
Here are my indications though : for topic 2, I'd suggest to add some vocabulary that would make things less dogmatic, especially concerning young people. I cannot imagine that the author thinks their text refers to all of them ?

TOPIC2: People no longer know how to write.
It's true that people write LESS AND LESS.
Young people mostly don't even know how to hold a pen any more. They only usually communicate by phone or SMS and are texting messages and are writing write with abbreviations and acronyms.
As well as having become lazy at writing They have become lazy at writing, and the few letters they send* are full of spelling mistakes. 63 WORDS

* en français on dirait "anacoluthe", en anglais "syntactic break" ? I agree

TOPIC3: Are smells are important?
Yes, smells are important to me. I like good fruit and flower fragrances, MORE THAN than musty smells.I prefer nice fruit and flower fragrances to musty smells. Smells evoke memories: encounters, events. A smell can be attached to a place or a person.
That's why psychoanalysts use smells.
Personally, I can't say whether smells are a source of inspiration. However, I always scent put scent in my home and household linen. Every morning, I spray on my eau de parfum after washing. It makes me feel good. (80 words)

I am not sure "scent" is right here:

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Réponse : LS62/Let's have a break 8 de here4u, postée le 21-05-2024 à 22:16:25 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Here is ANSWER B: please, indicate possible mistakes, and underline what looks clumsy to you.

Topic 3. Are smells important and a source of inspiration for you ?

I think smells are important for all human beings (not to speak of animals!); I once read smells were the first sensations a new-born gets from the outside world: babies begin to recognise their mother by her natural smell; as for being a source of inspiration, the « madeleine de Proust » naturally comes to everyone's mind: a certain fragrance can convey a whole world of memories, and you are suddenly overwhelmed with people and images from the past you would never have spontaneously remembered;... indirectly, this delicious-smelling little cake inspired one of the most famous pieces in French literature! And what about this odd and breath-taking novel « Perfume: the Story of a Murderer », which takes you to the strange and bewitching realm of scents?

for your help!

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