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Petite redaction
Message de pepepol posté le 12-11-2006 à 00:18:10 (S | E | F | I)
Hello

I have to do a redaction about 150 words. And I am not very good. Can someone help me, please? Thank you in advance.

I must do a little work in the past about my holidays, but is it good? The teacher said me about 150 words, It is short, but I prefer good before bad.


When I was ten years old, I went with my parents on holidays. For me, It was very unusual because we went to skiing. It was in April and the sun was shinning, there was not wind and the weather was beautiful. When I arrived at the mountains, everybody was leaving the station because there was no snow any more. I played all the day in the mountains but I didn´t see the snow. My parents didn´t like the day but for me It was wonderful.

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Modifié par felin le 12-11-2006 00:25:30
Formule de politesse

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Réponse: Petite redaction de nick27, postée le 12-11-2006 à 10:03:59 (S | E)
Hello,

1/ I went with my parents on holidays : Inverse "with my parents" et "on holiday".
2/ We went to skiing : Jamais de verbe -ing après "to go to".
==> To go doing something dans cet exemple.

3/ there was not wind : Wind est "uncountable" ==> There was no wind

4/ the weather was beautiful : Utilise plutôt fine/lovely/glorious

5/ When I arrived at the mountains => In the moutains
N'aurais-tu pas dû mettre "we" à la place de "I" ?

6/ there was no snow any more : Si tu as déjà mis "no", "anymore" (en un mot) ne marche pas.
=> There wasn't snow anymore
7/ It was wonderful : pas de majuscule à "it"

8/ My parents didn't like the day/trip

Bye bye

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