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Message de kerberos posté le 12-03-2005 à 17:35:44 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour à tous et à toutes,
J'ai quelques difficultées en anglais et voulais savoir si quelqu'un pouvait me corriger les fautes d'accord de grammaire etc...
Je voulais savoir également si messenger voulait dire messagerie.
Voici le texte que j'ai pondu !!
In this text I will try to answer the question « Is the Internet a passing fad or is it going to last ? ».
First of all let us start with the origin of Internet. Internet was created by the American army in the years 1960, when the army sought a mean of communication on rapid and new. At the beginning of the years 1970, academics American have succeeds in increasing the speed transmission of information on Internet, in order to communicating thanks to E-mail. Then Internet was placed at the disposal of all and became the mean of communication that everyone knows today.
Now let us write what Internet enables us to do and the place that it has in the life of all days. Firstly Internet is a mean of communication thanks to E-mail and the messenger instantaneous. Secondly it is a working tool because Internet is an inexhaustible source of information. Thirdly, it is also a means of entertainment thank to all the server of plays.
To conclude I think that Internet is essential for our modern life and it is for that we can not regarded as a phenomenon of mode. Internet will still last of many years until it is to replace by something of even more powerful.
merci de votre aide
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Edité par bridg le 12-03-2005 17:45
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Edité par joy813 le 13-03-2005 17:11
Message de kerberos posté le 12-03-2005 à 17:35:44 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour à tous et à toutes,
J'ai quelques difficulté
Je voulais savoir également si messenger voulait dire messagerie.
Voici le texte que j'ai pondu !!
In this text I will try to answer the question « Is the Internet a passing fad or is it going to last ? ».
First of all let us start with the origin of Internet. Internet was created by the American army in the years 1960, when the army sought a mean of communication on rapid and new. At the beginning of the years 1970, academics American have succeeds in increasing the speed transmission of information on Internet, in order to communicating thanks to E-mail. Then Internet was placed at the disposal of all and became the mean of communication that everyone knows today.
Now let us write what Internet enables us to do and the place that it has in the life of all days. Firstly Internet is a mean of communication thanks to E-mail and the messenger instantaneous. Secondly it is a working tool because Internet is an inexhaustible source of information. Thirdly, it is also a means of entertainment thank to all the server of plays.
To conclude I think that Internet is essential for our modern life and it is for that we can not regarded as a phenomenon of mode. Internet will still last of many years until it is to replace by something of even more powerful.
merci de votre aide
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Edité par bridg le 12-03-2005 17:45
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Edité par joy813 le 13-03-2005 17:11
Réponse: p'tit coup de main 2 de ruofei, postée le 12-03-2005 à 18:28:57 (S | E)
messenger= messager
mail box= messagerie
The Internet
(petit exercice sur le vocabulaire informatique proposé par jardin62 du côté de...English Only, je crois)
Réponse: Internet de ruofei, postée le 13-03-2005 à 06:12:29 (S | E)
In this text I am going to answer the question « Is the Internet the lastest fad or is it going to last ? ».
First of all let us start [Let us first start] with the origin of the Internet. The Internet was created by the American Army in the 1960's, when they were seeking for a faster and more advanced means of communication. During the early 1970's, American academics (adjectifs avant les noms) succeeded in increasing the fastness of the information and the Internet transmissions [speed transmission: voitures]. This made it possible to daily communicate via E-mails. From then on, the Internet has become available and accessible for more and more Internet users; it is nowadays, the indeniable great modern tool of communication .
Now let us [let us now] write about what the Internet enables one to do and its importance in one's everyday life. Firstly Internet is a mean of communication thanks to E-mail and the messenger instantaneous. Secondly it is a working tool because Internet is an inexhaustible source of information. Thirdly, it is also a means of entertainment thank to all the server of plays. (Not only a means of communcation i.e through E-mails and instant messenger, the Internet is, on the one hand, an exhaustive source of information and on the other hand, a working instrument to entertain oneself thanks to all the online game servers.)
To conclude I think that the Internet is essential for/in our modern life and cannot be considered as a mere fashion trend.. The Internet is sure to last for years until/unless something more powerful is is developed.
Quelques petites choses à revoir: connecteurs logiques, articles, dates, vocabulaire.
Réponse: Internet de kerberos, postée le 13-03-2005 à 14:39:35 (S | E)
merci ruofei c'est cool
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Edité par bridg le 13-03-2005 15:37
Réponse: Internet de ruofei, postée le 14-03-2005 à 07:15:03 (S | E)
bonjour Kerberos,
(il y a eu un bug à l'envoi de mon message...je retente). Je tenais à revenir sur ma correction qui n'a pas été très judicieuse...je n'avais pas pris le temps de vous expliquer son pourquoi du comment....
Je vais citer certains passages de votre texte:
> First of all let us start with: first of all + let us start...trop répétitif.
>
> ...when the army
> on rapid and new: maladroit
> At the beginning of
l'inverse: 'During the late 1970's' (at the end of the 1970's)
> ...
> ...in order to communicat
>...was placed at the disposal of all : sonne français! 'At everybody's disposal'...mais je pense que les adjectifs 'available' et 'accessible' seraient plus spécifiques à ce contexte
>
> Firstly, secondly, thirdly: un peu lourd ici, puique vous n'écrivez pas vraiment une argumention mais une description
> ...
> ...
> ...will still last of many years : is going to last long. /to last a long time.
Hope this helps!