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Message de girl2067 posté le 26-03-2007 à 12:41:40 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour j'ai une rédaction d'anglais à faire ... J'ai quelques difficultés donc si vous pouvez me corriger les fautes de grammaires, orthographes ...merci d'avance
Voici le sujet :
D'après la chanson de The Cure - Boys don't cry
I would say I'm sorry
If I thought that it would change your mind
But I know that this time
I've said too much
Been too unkind
I try to laugh about it
Cover it all up with lies
I try and
Laugh about it
Hiding the tears in my eyes
'cause boys don't cry
Boys don't cry
I would break down at your feet
And beg forgiveness
Plead with you
But I know that
It's too late
And now there's nothing I can do
So I try to laugh about it
Cover it all up with lies
I try to
laugh about it
Hiding the tears in my eyes
'cause boys don't cry
I would tell you
That I loved you
If I thought that you would stay
But I know that it's no use
That you've already
Gone away
Misjudged your limits
Pushed you too far
Took you for granted
I thought that you needed me more
Now I would do most anything
To get you back by my side
But I just
Keep on laughing
Hiding the tears in my eyes
'cause boys don't cry
Boys don't cry
Boys don't cry
Si vous voulez la traduction je vous la passe !
Il faut écrire la réponse de la fille sous forme de lettre à la chanson.
Dans cette lettre il faut faire allusion à ce qu'il c'est passé, mais aussi 2expressions du regret et l'impacte de la chanson sur la fille.
Dnc voici le contenu principal de la lettre :
Your song... It's so romantic, I'm really moved. But you have said too much bad things about me. I know, you wasn't conscience this night. Why ? It's the fault from the alcool and your comportement. I regret I can't continu with you. The life isn't a novel or a utopia. I don't forgive you, it's impossible. I am so disappointed from your reaction. For me you have me pushed too far.
The lyrics from the song are faulse ... Now you are far from me. And the proverb 'Out of sight, out of might' is trough for me .
I don't feel the same sentiments that I have feel two weeks ago. TOday, is the second weeks that I didn't see you and you don't miss me.
But when I remember the good moments past with you, I think that you must keep the better moments in the bottom from you heart.
Forgot the quarel and particularity the last. I wishe you has said too much. I had misjudge you ... I regrets it's was a short relation.
You and me it's today past ! I have turn a new page.
Excuse me my courage failed me. I can't come in London to say you 'goodbye'.
It's finish, forgot me.
Merci d'avance
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-03-2007 13:05
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Modifié par vero7000 le 26-03-2007 15:05
Message de girl2067 posté le 26-03-2007 à 12:41:40 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour j'ai une rédaction d'anglais à faire ... J'ai quelques difficultés donc si vous pouvez me corriger les fautes de grammaire
Voici le sujet :
D'après la chanson de The Cure - Boys don't cry
I would say I'm sorry
If I thought that it would change your mind
But I know that this time
I've said too much
Been too unkind
I try to laugh about it
Cover it all up with lies
I try and
Laugh about it
Hiding the tears in my eyes
'cause boys don't cry
Boys don't cry
I would break down at your feet
And beg forgiveness
Plead with you
But I know that
It's too late
And now there's nothing I can do
So I try to laugh about it
Cover it all up with lies
I try to
laugh about it
Hiding the tears in my eyes
'cause boys don't cry
I would tell you
That I loved you
If I thought that you would stay
But I know that it's no use
That you've already
Gone away
Misjudged your limits
Pushed you too far
Took you for granted
I thought that you needed me more
Now I would do most anything
To get you back by my side
But I just
Keep on laughing
Hiding the tears in my eyes
'cause boys don't cry
Boys don't cry
Boys don't cry
Si vous voulez la traduction je vous la passe !
Il faut écrire la réponse de la fille sous forme de lettre à la chanson.
Dans cette lettre il faut faire allusion à ce qu'il c'est passé, mais aussi 2expressions du regret et l'impacte de la chanson sur la fille.
Dnc voici le contenu principal de la lettre :
Your song... It's so romantic, I'm really moved. But you have said too much bad things about me. I know, you wasn't conscience this night. Why ? It's the fault from the alcool and your comportement. I regret I can't continu with you. The life isn't a novel or a utopia. I don't forgive you, it's impossible. I am so disappointed from your reaction. For me you have me pushed too far.
The lyrics from the song are faulse ... Now you are far from me. And the proverb 'Out of sight, out of might' is trough for me .
I don't feel the same sentiments that I have feel two weeks ago. TOday, is the second weeks that I didn't see you and you don't miss me.
But when I remember the good moments past with you, I think that you must keep the better moments in the bottom from you heart.
Forgot the quarel and particularity the last. I wishe you has said too much. I had misjudge you ... I regrets it's was a short relation.
You and me it's today past ! I have turn a new page.
Excuse me my courage failed me. I can't come in London to say you 'goodbye'.
It's finish, forgot me.
Merci d'avance
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-03-2007 13:05
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Modifié par vero7000 le 26-03-2007 15:05
Réponse: correction rédaction de girl2067, postée le 26-03-2007 à 13:30:59 (S | E)
bonjour, lucile83 je viens de voir que vousavez modifé
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Modifié par vero7000 le 26-03-2007 15:05
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