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Message de niko456 posté le 18-11-2007 à 22:18:51 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour, j'ai une rédaction à rendre voilà ce que j'ai fait merci de m'indiquer les fautes si il y en a :
English,math,science, history,health are the compulsory subjects in high school in US
He could practise differents sports at school wich were Fottball,baseball..
there were extra-curricular activities too in his school wich were Band,chess...
he could play a cello and orchestra at school
you can study several language in us: there are spanish...
Students cannot go out during the day.
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Modifié par bridg le 18-11-2007 22:22
Message de niko456 posté le 18-11-2007 à 22:18:51 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour, j'ai une rédaction à rendre voilà ce que j'ai fait merci de m'indiquer les fautes si il y en a :
English,math,science, history,health are the compulsory subjects in high school in US
He could practise differents sports at school wich were Fottball,baseball..
there were extra-curricular activities too in his school wich were Band,chess...
he could play a cello and orchestra at school
you can study several language in us: there are spanish...
Students cannot go out during the day.
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Modifié par bridg le 18-11-2007 22:22
Réponse: correction de rédaction de liasensei, postée le 18-11-2007 à 23:49:11 (S | E)
ce texte me semble un peu trop ambigu, il y a quelques fautes d'orthographe puis, une fois tu utilises "he" (qui est-ce?) et une fois tu utilises "you"..., une fois tu parles au passé et une fois tu parles au présent.. Il faudra que tu mettes ça au point
remarque: attention à la distinction "a witch" et "which"!
English,maths, science, history,health X -personnellement, je mettrais des majuscules...- are the compulsory subjects in high school in the United States.
He could practise differents sports at school wich were Fottball,baseball..there were extra-curricular activities too in his school wich were Band ??,chess. he could play a cello and orchestra at school
you can study several language in us: there are spanish...
At school, you can practise different types of sport activities such as football and baseball or other extracurricular activities like playing chess, playing the cello or studying languages. (sachant que le mot "football" ne s'entend pas pareil aux USA) ... le mieux c'est de synthétiser pour éviter la répétition dans ce passage...
Students cannot go out during the day. (il faudrait mieux expliquer pourquoi ils ne peuvent pas sortir)
voilà, c'était ma proposition de correction...
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