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Message de cambabz posté le 14-06-2008 à 15:54:45 (S | E | F)
coucou, voilà pour décrocher mon diplome, il m'a été demandé de réaliser une multitude de textes. Dont celui-ci. Le sujet étant : 2 jeunes de moins de 18ans ont cassé la vérenda d'un vieux couple, le juge laisse passer l'affaire..Es-tu daccord, pourquoi ? quel sentence tu leur donnerais?
Merci d'avance
i am not agree with the judge because criminality is increasing day after day however punishments are often less important than the crime. Here, in this case both young of less than 18 years , the judge doesn't condemn them
because they are not major. it be unfair to the victim and the two teens go on living as nothing had happened and start again at any moment.in this way the juvenile delinquency will increase more and more The punishment must be effective and proportional to the seriousness of the crime with a view to not starting that again. so, i will punish them with community service and with a fine for repairing the (veranda) .
Message de cambabz posté le 14-06-2008 à 15:54:45 (S | E | F)
coucou, voilà pour décrocher mon diplome, il m'a été demandé de réaliser une multitude de textes. Dont celui-ci. Le sujet étant : 2 jeunes de moins de 18ans ont cassé la vérenda d'un vieux couple, le juge laisse passer l'affaire..Es-tu daccord, pourquoi ? quel sentence tu leur donnerais?
Merci d'avance
i am not agree with the judge because criminality is increasing day after day however punishments are often less important than the crime. Here, in this case both young of less than 18 years , the judge doesn't condemn them
because they are not major. it be unfair to the victim and the two teens go on living as nothing had happened and start again at any moment.in this way the juvenile delinquency will increase more and more The punishment must be effective and proportional to the seriousness of the crime with a view to not starting that again. so, i will punish them with community service and with a fine for repairing the (veranda) .
Réponse: punishment ( law) de cambabz, postée le 14-06-2008 à 17:11:12 (S | E)
the violence in cities is increasing more and more indeed this increase gives a feeling of insecurity .
in first time the law are very less than the crime. are they enough strict ? No. The criminals or the delinquents
aren't any more afraid of the law. On the other hand the juvenile delinquency is increasing too indeed the minors
are no so severely judged as the major for the same crimes. it's not just. they should be punished as everybody
secondly they should be fair more schools because most young people aren't sent to school they should invest
more in school to motivate youngs to make something of their two hand for create more jobs to motivate
young people to go to school and not to live in the street with the violence, the drug, the alcohol...
nowadays a person is killed for a cigarette that's why it will be notice the problem closely and found a solution
THANKS
Réponse: punishment ( law) de laure95, postée le 14-06-2008 à 19:05:39 (S | E)
Bonjour cambabz. Voici ce que tu dois corriger.
I am not agree (être d'accord: to agree, donc il faut mettre TO AGREE à la forme négative du présent simple)with the judge because criminality is increasing day after day (every day). However, punishments are often less important than the crime. Here, in this case, (choisis) both young or less than 18 years (rajoute un nom avant both), the judge doesn't condemn them because they are not makor. It be (à conjuguer) unfair to (for) the victim and the two teens go on living as if nothing had happened and start again at any moment. In this way, the juvenile (à vérifier) deliquency will increase more and more. The punishment must be effective and proportional to the seriousness of the crime with a view to not starting again (mot à mot). So, i will (je mettrais du conditionnel) punish them with community service and with a fine for (to) repairing the veranda.
The viloence in (the) cities is increasing more and more. Indeed, this increase gives (us) a feeling of insecurity.
In first time
the law are (singulier!!!) very less (moins quoi?) than the crime. Are they enough strict (inverser l'ordre)? No, (they aren't) The criminals or the deliquents aren't any more (à la fin de la phrase) afraid of the law. On the other hand, the juvenile deliquency is increasing too. Indeed the minors are no severly judged as the majors for the same crimes. It's not just (unfair).They should be punished as everybody. Secondly, they should be fair more school because most young people aren't sent to school. They should invest more in school to motivate (the) youngs to make something of their two hand(s) for (to) create more jobs, to motivate young people to go to school and not to live in the street with violence, (the) drug, (the) alcohol...Nowadays, a person is killed for a cigarette, that's why it will be notice
the problem closely and found (pourquoi le prétérit?) a solution.
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