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Me dire si mon texte est correct
Message de bikerboy posté le 03-02-2010 à 17:55:48
Bonjour, si quelqu'un pourrais me dire sire si il y a des fautes mais je l'ai déjà corrigé une fois donc voilà. Merci.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-02-2010 21:48

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Réponse: Me dire si mon texte est correct de bikerboy, postée le 03-02-2010 à 17:57:20
Voilà le texte:
Booba is the nickname of Elie Yaffa (born on 9th December, 1976) Booba is my favourite french rapper, he is from Boulogne-Billancourt, a city in the western suburbs of Paris. He is of Senegalese and French descent.

He started rapping at the age of seventeen. He created his own clothing line called Unkut. He has sold nearly 750000 album. I’ve know him since 2003.

In this song he is with akon, a Senegalese-American R&B singer who has sold over 20 million album. His career began in 2004.

The name of the song is locked up, it is about the prison, it destroyed the people when he is inside.

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Réponse: Me dire si mon texte est correct de gerondif, postée le 03-02-2010 à 18:23:50
Bonsoir,

Booba is the nickname of Elie Yaffa (born on 9th December, 1976) Booba is my favourite french(majuscule) rapper, he is from Boulogne-Billancourt, a city in the western suburbs of Paris. He is of Senegalese and French descent.(origin ?)

He started rapping at the age of seventeen. He created his own clothing line called Unkut. He has sold nearly 750000 album (pluriel). I’ve know(participe passé irrégulier) him since 2003.

In this song he is with akon, a Senegalese-American R&B singer who has sold over 20 million album (pluriel). His career began in 2004.

The name of the song is "locked up", it is about the prison, it destroyed(pourquoi au passé) the people when (people est un mot pluriel)he is inside.

sur la dernière phrase, on pourrait faire: elle nous montre comment la prison détruit les gens qui sont à l'intérieur.

ou alors en partant de votre phrase:
it's about prison, comment elle détruit les gens qui sont à l'intérieur.

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Réponse: Me dire si mon texte est correct de bikerboy, postée le 03-02-2010 à 18:37:50
Ok merci

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