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Message de petite-tagada- posté le 28-10-2011 à 21:57:53 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
J'ai une rédaction à faire sur le thème de l'argent dans la société. J'ai donc écrit un essai que voici et j'aimerais savoir s'il y a des erreurs ou si dans l'ensemble c'est plutôt correct s'il vous plaît
Money is an important subject in our society. So we can wonder if money has become the priority in modern society. To answer this question, first, I will demonstrate how money can be considered as the priority. Then, I will show that money isn't the priority.
First, money is omnipresent in our society. Indeed, modern society has become a consumer society which pushes us to buy more and more even material goods which are not indispensable but only to satisfy us as for example with new technologies: the IPhone, the Ipad....
However, to have a present family at his elbow, good health, a good work... is more important than to have money. As the proverb says, "money can't buy happiness". For example, in the poor countries, people do not have or few money and they live happy.
For me, money is not the most important in my life. I think that in our quest for money and material goods, we too often forget what is truly important, prefering material and superfluous to freedom and love. But money causes many damage in the society as the economic crisis.
beaucoup ! md
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-10-2011 22:00
Message de petite-tagada- posté le 28-10-2011 à 21:57:53 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
J'ai une rédaction à faire sur le thème de l'argent dans la société. J'ai donc écrit un essai que voici et j'aimerais savoir s'il y a des erreurs ou si dans l'ensemble c'est plutôt correct s'il vous plaît
Money is an important subject in our society. So we can wonder if money has become the priority in modern society. To answer this question, first, I will demonstrate how money can be considered as the priority. Then, I will show that money isn't the priority.
First, money is omnipresent in our society. Indeed, modern society has become a consumer society which pushes us to buy more and more even material goods which are not indispensable but only to satisfy us as for example with new technologies: the IPhone, the Ipad....
However, to have a present family at his elbow, good health, a good work... is more important than to have money. As the proverb says, "money can't buy happiness". For example, in the poor countries, people do not have or few money and they live happy.
For me, money is not the most important in my life. I think that in our quest for money and material goods, we too often forget what is truly important, prefering material and superfluous to freedom and love. But money causes many damage in the society as the economic crisis.
beaucoup ! md-------------------
Modifié par lucile83 le 28-10-2011 22:00
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