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Correction/ about war
Message de olyday posté le 05-04-2012 à 21:11:27 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger mon expression écrite sur la guerre s'il vous plaît?
Je vous remercie par avance de votre aide
In this passage, the goal of the writer is to show the consequences of the war on the society. Indeed, the war can be a trauma in the life of the peoples who undergo a fight that they not necessarily want.
In this text, the war has important moral consequences on the society because people are worried and they are afraid for their family, their country and their future. They don’t feel protected any more, they are upset and they fear that the war lasts for a long time. Consequently, they try simply to face up to this situation by supporting and helping themselves. In that case, both peoples countries confront themselves and in the same time they live together in the USA it can then have there feelings of persecution, confrontation and grudge. The war has so fatal consequences on the harmony and the cohabitation between the peoples.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-04-2012 21:24
Message de olyday posté le 05-04-2012 à 21:11:27 (S | E | F)
Hello,Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger mon expression écrite sur la guerre s'il vous plaît?
Je vous remercie par avance de votre aide
In this passage, the goal of the writer is to show the consequences of the war on the society. Indeed, the war can be a trauma in the life of the peoples who undergo a fight that they not necessarily want.
In this text, the war has important moral consequences on the society because people are worried and they are afraid for their family, their country and their future. They don’t feel protected any more, they are upset and they fear that the war lasts for a long time. Consequently, they try simply to face up to this situation by supporting and helping themselves. In that case, both peoples countries confront themselves and in the same time they live together in the USA it can then have there feelings of persecution, confrontation and grudge. The war has so fatal consequences on the harmony and the cohabitation between the peoples.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-04-2012 21:24
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