Correction /Carl's dream

Correction /Carl's dream
Message de lili97kat posté le 28-10-2012 à 12:57:13 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,

Pourriez-vous m'aider à me corriger? S'il vous plaît.
Merci pour vos réponses.

Carl dreams of becoming a baseball star because his father is a poor bricklayer and temporarily jobless. It is difficult for them to have money. He not want be like that in the future. Also, he likes baseball and he thinks that in America, there is opportunity to become that you want.
His father think that a bad idea: it is difficult to integrate a fame club and even if he is accepted, his father thinks that his son is too weak, fragile compare to the others.
Relationship between Carl and his father is strained. Indeed, they are in disagree.
About Carl's future, I can imagine that if he is successfull, his father will be proud of him nevertheless he is fails, that will be a hard shock for him.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-10-2012 13:48

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Réponse: Correction /Carl's dream de notrepere, postée le 28-10-2012 à 16:44:59 (S | E)
Hello

Carl dreams of becoming a baseball star because his father is a poor bricklayer and temporarily jobless. It is difficult for them to have money. He [auxiliary missing]] not want be like that in the future. Also, he likes baseball and he thinks that in America, there is an opportunity to become what you want.
His father think(accorde) that (verbe manquant) a bad idea: it is difficult to integrate a fame club and even if he is accepted, his father thinks that his son is too weak, fragile compared to the others.
The relationship between Carl and his father is strained. Indeed, they are in disagree (mal dit).
About Carl's future, I can imagine that if he is successfull, his father will be proud of him. Nevertheless, he is fails (if he fails), that will be a hard shock for him.

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Réponse: Correction /Carl's dream de lili97kat, postée le 29-10-2012 à 17:55:49 (S | E)
Hello,

Thanks for your answer.

Carl dreams of becoming a baseball star because his father is a poor bricklayer and temporarily jobless. It is difficult for them to have money. He doesn't want to be like that in the future. Also, he likes baseball and he thinks that in America, there is an opportunity to become what you want.
His father thinks that is a bad idea: it is difficult to integrate a famous club and even if he is accepted, his father thinks that his son is too weak, fragile compared to the others.
The relationship between Carl and his father is strained. Indeed, they are in discord.
About Carl's future, I can imagine that if he is successfull, his father will be proud of him. Nevertheless, if he fails, that will be a hard shock for him.

I hope that it's good.

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Réponse: Correction /Carl's dream de bluestar, postée le 30-10-2012 à 00:35:30 (S | E)
Hello,

"to integrate a famous club"...'integrate' is not the verb that would normally be used here.

"successfull" - check the spelling here (as already indicated)

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