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Message de gaganel posté le 09-05-2013 à 16:53:55 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
j'ai une expression écrite à faire en anglais sur le sujet suivant :
The media do not always respect people's sufferings and private lives. Do you share this view ? Give examples (200 words).
Voici ce que j'ai fait :
The media are a good way to see the news about celebrities. But we can think that they don't always respect people's sufferings and private lives. Indeed we can take the example of the paparazzi. Thez infringe on celebrities private life. They take pictures and then give it to the media. Next photos are put on the media. But often it exposes false information. Moreover this people can't be quiet because paparazzi are always there. They always spy on celebrities so they know everything. When a star is depressed, have lost one of his close relations or have cheat on his partner, they know it. And when it is exposed on the media, then everybody knows it ! For instance when Kristen Stewart was unfaithful to Robert Pattinson she tried to be discreet but paparazzi were there ! And Robert learned this piece of news by the media ! To conclude we can say that the media do not respect people's private lives and they often tell anythings about them.
J'aurais voulu savoir si c'était bon, s'il y a des fautes et si je peux rajouter des idées.
Je n'ai pas été très inspirée et je n'arrive pas à 200 mots. Some help please ?
Thanks
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-05-2013 17:10
Message de gaganel posté le 09-05-2013 à 16:53:55 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
j'ai une expression écrite à faire en anglais sur le sujet suivant :
The media do not always respect people's sufferings and private lives. Do you share this view ? Give examples (200 words).
Voici ce que j'ai fait :
The media are a good way to see the news about celebrities. But we can think that they don't always respect people's sufferings and private lives. Indeed we can take the example of the paparazzi. Thez infringe on celebrities private life. They take pictures and then give it to the media. Next photos are put on the media. But often it exposes false information. Moreover this people can't be quiet because paparazzi are always there. They always spy on celebrities so they know everything. When a star is depressed, have lost one of his close relations or have cheat on his partner, they know it. And when it is exposed on the media, then everybody knows it ! For instance when Kristen Stewart was unfaithful to Robert Pattinson she tried to be discreet but paparazzi were there ! And Robert learned this piece of news by the media ! To conclude we can say that the media do not respect people's private lives and they often tell anythings about them.
J'aurais voulu savoir si c'était bon, s'il y a des fautes et si je peux rajouter des idées.
Je n'ai pas été très inspirée et je n'arrive pas à 200 mots. Some help please ?
Thanks
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-05-2013 17:10
Réponse: Expression écrite/media de lucile83, postée le 09-05-2013 à 22:30:16 (S | E)
Hello
Les fautes sont en bleu.
The media are a good way to see the news about celebrities. But we can think that they don't always respect people's sufferings and private lives. Indeed we can take the example of the paparazzi. Thez infringe on celebrities cas possessif private life. They take pictures and then give it to the media. Next photos are put on the media. But often place de l'adverbe it exposes false information. Moreover this people can't be quiet because paparazzi are always there. They always spy on celebrities so they know everything. When a star is depressed, have lost one of his close relations or have cheat on his partner, they know it. And when it is exposed on the media, then everybody knows it ! For instance when Kristen Stewart was unfaithful to Robert Pattinson she tried to be discreet but paparazzi were there ! And Robert learned this piece of news by the media !
To conclude we can say that the media do not respect people's private lives and they often tell anythings about them.
Pour étoffer votre texte vous pouvez parler des avantages car là vous n'avez parlé que des inconvénients. Votre devoir est donc mal construit.Vous devez respecter le schéma Thèse,antithèse,synthèse.
Réponse: Expression écrite/media de gaganel, postée le 10-05-2013 à 15:10:01 (S | E)
Merci
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