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Message de wasp posté le 20-11-2013 à 21:30:16 (S | E | F)
Hello tout le monde,
j'ai un petit exposé à faire pour demain sur Apple et je suis pas sûr de la justesse de mon dernier paragraphe. Si quelqu'un pouvait y jeter un coup d'oeil et me dire s'il y voit des aberrations, ce serait très gentil :p .
Merci pour votre aide.
Le texte en question :
Apple has subcontracted in Asia like Foxconn, to produce electronic components for its products. Since 2006 many international organizations denounce inhumane working conditions.
In 2009 an employee in China killed himself after being suspected of thelf then beaten by the company where he worked. In some factories the weekly working time exceeds 60 hours. While the legal limit in China is 49 hours. Some factories pay employees less than the minimum wage in China, which is 800 yuan.
Eleven cases of child labor were reported.
In conclusion Apple marked the end of the 20th century and the early 21th centuries in the technology era. Today everyone knows Apple, it has become a symbol. Despite the death of Steve Jobs the company saw its profits increase and the cult of Steve Jobs reinforces its attraction.
The few controversies are not enough to bring down its influence on the world.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-11-2013 21:33
Message de wasp posté le 20-11-2013 à 21:30:16 (S | E | F)
Hello tout le monde,
j'ai un petit exposé à faire pour demain sur Apple et je suis pas sûr de la justesse de mon dernier paragraphe. Si quelqu'un pouvait y jeter un coup d'oeil et me dire s'il y voit des aberrations, ce serait très gentil :p .
Merci pour votre aide.
Le texte en question :
Apple has subcontracted in Asia like Foxconn, to produce electronic components for its products. Since 2006 many international organizations denounce inhumane working conditions.
In 2009 an employee in China killed himself after being suspected of thelf then beaten by the company where he worked. In some factories the weekly working time exceeds 60 hours. While the legal limit in China is 49 hours. Some factories pay employees less than the minimum wage in China, which is 800 yuan.
Eleven cases of child labor were reported.
In conclusion Apple marked the end of the 20th century and the early 21th centuries in the technology era. Today everyone knows Apple, it has become a symbol. Despite the death of Steve Jobs the company saw its profits increase and the cult of Steve Jobs reinforces its attraction.
The few controversies are not enough to bring down its influence on the world.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-11-2013 21:33
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