Help/mobile phones

Help/mobile phones
Message from adelaidechiu posted on 26-12-2017 at 04:51:24 (D | E | F)
Hello,
Could you help me please with the correction of my text?
Thank for any reply.
Being a product of high-technology, mobile phones are being more and more widely used. It’s small in size, light in weight and easy to carry, offering fast and convenient service for munication. It’s of multi-function. The users use it for calling, sending short messages and internet-surfing.
In recent years, mobile phones have been popular among the young people. Quite a few use them at school to keep in touch with their families and friends, which, of course brings convenience to them.
At the same time, the phone case is becoming more and more important. Not only could it protect our cellphone, but also it makes our cellphone more personalized.
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Edited by lucile83 on 26-12-2017 08:01

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Re: Help/mobile phones from here4u, posted on 26-12-2017 at 10:51:03 (D | E)
Hello !

Being (a) productS of high-technology, mobile phones are being more and more widely used.(You should choose between singular or plural, and stick to your choice!) It’s?? small in size, light in weight and easy to carry, offering fast and convenient service for XXXmunication. It’s of multi-function. The users use it for calling, sending= to call, send... and surf...) short messages and internet-surfing.
In recent years, mobile phones have been popular among the young people. Quite a few(Many!) use them at school to keep in touch with their families and friends, which, of course brings convenience to them.
At the same time, the phone case is becoming more and more important. Not only could it protect our cellphoneS, but also it (word order!)makes our cellphone more personalized.

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