Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38

Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38
Message de here4u posté le 01-09-2025 à 21:11:30 (S | E | F)
Hello dear Friends!

Another easy exercice that everyone can do!


Les vacances sont terminées, et nous reprenons doucement notre travail ! Courage !
Je sais que l'Expression libre est la compétence la plus difficile à bien acquérir dans l'apprentissage d'une langue, même si elle est notre langue maternelle, d'ailleurs...

Certains m’avaient dit être gênés d’exprimer des idées personnelles ( - ils avaient l’impression – souvent fausse – de les exprimer maladroitement ) Vous savez que je ne vous demande pas de " raconter votre vie " si vous ne le désirez pas... Je souhaite juste vous voir vous exprimer sur tout sujet aussi " librement " que possible.
De plus, je pense que vous aurez maintenant compris que pour moi, toute expression, même maladroite, est intéressante et a de la valeur. Elle nous stimule tous à " trouver mieux " !

Voici les questions auxquelles vous pourrez répondre :

1) Do you like gardening? What do you grow?

2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?

3) Do you believe in Astrology and Horoscopes?

4) What sort of restaurant is your favourite?

Vous pouvez répondre à 1 ou 2 questions au choix – en notant bien les références - et développer celle(s) que vous voulez, jusqu’à atteindre en tout un maximum d’environ 150 mots.

Envoyez-moi vos réponses en mp et je publierai une première série que vous 'corrigerez' (en bleu d’abord pendant deux jours) puis en vert… Une fois le premier texte corrigé au mieux, je publierai ensuite la deuxième série... (sans changements donc ! ) Vous gagnez de la liberté (celle de ne pas parler de plusieurs sujets, ceux qui ne vous " inspirent pas "... Vous écrivez la longueur que vous voulez, vous pouvez choisir d'inventer, de plaisanter, ou de répondre avec sérieux... Nous vous suivrons !

Cet exercice sera pour vous un ou en fonction de la qualité de vos écrits et des difficultés (surmontées) dans la prestation...

Cet exercice sera corrigé le vendredi 12 septembre 2025 ! Go for it! with THE FORCE.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 02-09-2025 à 19:31:29 (S | E)
Hello dear friends!

Here is our first EXPRESSION of the school year!

ANSWER 1: TOPIC 2: 2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?
Please, indicate the possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But this year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the classroom, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told off very often and one day, she grabbed the little girl by his hair and shocked her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that and this is one of my worst memories of school.

for your help!

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 03-09-2025 à 12:17:50 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Wake up, please!

We have other ANSWERS in the waiting! A lot of work in perspective...

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 03-09-2025 à 17:53:46 (S | E)
Hello here4u!

ANSWER 1: TOPIC 2: 2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?
Please, indicate the possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

This is a good text.

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But this year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the classroom, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told off very often (something missing?) and one day, she grabbed the little girl by his hair and shocked her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that and this is one of my worst memories of school.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de alouettelulu, postée le 03-09-2025 à 22:24:03 (S | E)
ANSWER 1: TOPIC 2: 2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?

Merci à Gerold pour ses indications. Voici ce que je propose pour corriger mon texte :

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told off her very often and one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and shocked her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that and this is one of my worst memories of school.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 03-09-2025 à 22:50:31 (S | E)
Hello Lulu thelark! I'll pluck you! (just kidding!)

Here, you're disobeying 2 rules...
- indications (mistakes) are blue, but 'suggestions' (corrections) are green.
- but most important: you mustn't give your corrections before due time! (2 days - especially as Magie is posting from the other side of the world! ) Then, only then and usually not before I gave my extra indications, are you allowed to 'suggest' in green...

Here is your (partly) corrected text with my own indications:

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told off her very often and one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and shocked her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that and this is one of my worst memories of school.

A good text, indeed!

No hard feelings, Alouette... but please, don't correct this before tomorrow at noon, to give other members an opportunity to participate!

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 05-09-2025 à 10:00:06 (S | E)
Hello !
On dirait que tout le monde a eu peur de se faire plumer …. Ne craignez rien, c’était une ( mauvaise) blague ! J’ai juste envie de chanter lorsque je vous lis ! L.humour et la plaisanterie passent mal à l.écrit … C’était juste une boutade !
Je récapitule : on indique les fautes possibles en bleu pendant deux jours, puis en vert pendant les jours suivants. à tous pour votre travail !

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 05-09-2025 à 11:24:24 (S | E)
Hello!

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told her off very often and, (comma) one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and traumatized her. I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that event, which is one of my worst memories of school.

I'm not sure about what the problem with "to shock" is. Perhaps the little girl was certainly too terrified to be "shocked" (= scandalisée), but the other pupils could have been. However, dictionaries also translate "to shock" by "bouleverser", which could apply to her.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de alouettelulu, postée le 05-09-2025 à 14:18:19 (S | E)
I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told her offvery often and, one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and shook her ! I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that event, which is one of my worst memories of school.

Ce n'était pas to shock, que j'ai écrit par étourderie et mal relu par étourderie également , mais to shake, shook, shaken : secouer. Bad memory, indeed !

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 05-09-2025 à 22:47:40 (S | E)
Hello!

J'avais deviné la confusion 'shock'/ 'shook' ! Ils sont souvent assimilés...

ANSWER B: (blue: 6 and 7th- Green 8th and 9th) Please indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables I sow the seeds, or the stones and I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, most often I get some small stems that etiolate very quickly, but I also have pleasant surprises and I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers.
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to make a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. I like to find in flea markets old objects that I renovate to integrate them into floral decorations and enhance a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening, it's a hobby, of escape and happiness, every morning I come to say hello to my plants and I notice that they have grown overnight, so my day starts well.

for your help!

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 06-09-2025 à 14:06:42 (S | E)
Hello dears, (writers and readers),

If you don't have much to 'correct', try to be stricter and watch the length of sentences, the ponctuation.
Another very important point to enrich an expression is the use of link words. ('and' and 'but' are not really interesting...)

The purpose of this exercise is to help everyone improve their 'expression', therefore, do not hesitate to SUGGEST and to JUSTIFY the good constructions you've noticed.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 07-09-2025 à 08:39:51 (S | E)
Hello!

ANSWER B: (blue: 6 and 7th- Green 8th and 9th) Please indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables punctuation I sow the seeds, or the stones punctuation and I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, most often I get some small stems that etiolate* very quickly, but I also have pleasant surprises and I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers (this sentence is too long, it could be split after "quickly", and "but" could be replaced by a synonym).
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to make (a more specific word, perhaps?) a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. I like to find in flea markets old objects that I renovate to integrate them into floral decorations and (I would use a conjunction expressing a purpose) enhance a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening, it's a hobby, of (is this "of" correct? Anyway, I would rather use a relative clause) escape and happiness, every morning I come to say hello to my plants and xx (I would add something here and delete "so")I notice that they have grown overnight, so my day starts well.

*For some reason, my spell check doesn't like "etiolate".

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 07-09-2025 à 13:04:39 (S | E)
Hello!

Well, now, Gerold is mixing up his colours too...
Good work anyway...

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de magie8, postée le 08-09-2025 à 09:15:58 (S | E)
Hello Dears
Voici mon essai d'amélioration qui a été guidé par les précieux conseils de Gerold selon les indications de here4u

topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables, I sow the seeds, or the stones, then I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, most often I get some small stems that etiolate* very quickly. However I also have pleasant surprises, especially I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers.
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to power a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. I like to find in flea markets old objects that I clean to integrate them into floral decorations in order to enhance a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening, is a hobby, which give escape and happiness. Every morning I come to say hello to my plants and when I notice that they have grown overnight,() my day starts well.

s'étioler= to blanch/wither (botany= to etiolate

Je vous avouerais que je ne comprends rien aux longueurs des phrases, celle incriminée aujourd'hui avait 36 mots. Dans: "playing with the words" 60 mots sont autorisés. Dans la littérature française Victor Hugo et Marcel Proust vous offrent chacun une phrase qui dépasse 800 mots....En littérature contemporaine, la. moyenne est de 40 mots...

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 09-09-2025 à 16:49:43 (S | E)
Hello

Magie!

topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables, I sow the seeds, or the stones, then I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, most often I get some small stems that etiolate very quickly. However comma I also have pleasant surprises, especially I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers.
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to power a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. I like to find in flea markets old objects that I clean (or restore)* to integrate them into floral decorations in order to enhance a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening no comma is a hobby, which gives escape and happiness. Every morning I come to say hello to my plants and when I notice that they have grown overnight,() my day starts well.

* I think that "renovate" ("to repair and improve something, especially a building", Cambridge dictionary) did not suit here.

Je vous avouerais que je ne comprends rien aux longueurs des phrases, celle incriminée aujourd'hui avait 36 mots. Dans: "playing with the words" 60 mots sont autorisés. Dans la littérature française Victor Hugo et Marcel Proust vous offrent chacun une phrase qui dépasse 800 mots....En littérature contemporaine, la. moyenne est de 40 mots...

En effet, cette phrase n'était pas bien longue. Je trouve quand même qu'elle se lit mieux une fois scindée en deux.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de tonytanium, postée le 09-09-2025 à 17:10:48 (S | E)
ANSWER 1: TOPIC 2: 2) What is your best (or your worst) memory of school?

Hello there, to answer your above question I would like to say that my worst memory of school is when I wad 10 years-old, I had a punishment by my school-master because I pushed a school-mate during the running exercise. Although I shoudn't have done that, the sanction was to write a thousand times the following phrase: "I mustn't hit a girl even with a rose".
After I completed the sanction, all school masters in my town as well as teachers were banned from giving such sanctions considered as torture for someone of such a young age.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 09-09-2025 à 22:35:32 (S | E)
Hello dear writers and correctors,

Je ne savais plus sur quel exemplaire je devais remettre mes Indications finales avant correction...
J'ai choisi le dernier, chronologiquement. Merci à vous qui avez bien joué le jeu de la recherche de meilleures solutions...

topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables, I sow the seeds, or the stones, then I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, (punctuation?) most often I get some small stems that etiolate / wither very quickly. However comma I also have pleasant surprises, especially I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers. Bien
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to power a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. B I like to find in flea markets old objects (revoir l'ordre des mots) that I clean (or restore)* to integrate them into floral decorations in order to enhance a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.B
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening no comma is a hobby, which gives escape and happiness. Every morning I come to say hello to my plants and when I notice that they have grown overnight,() my day starts well.

* I think that "renovate" ("to repair and improve something, especially a building", Cambridge dictionary) did not suit here.



- 'etiolate'est le terme qui serait dans un livre de botanique. 'wither' est plus usuel.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 09-09-2025 à 22:49:20 (S | E)
Hello tonytanium,

I won't submit this expression to corrections for now.
I'm sorry, but if you have read the rules above, you'll have noticed that you should have sent your work to me by mp, and then stood in line to have your friends 'advice.
I still have one ANSWER waiting, and I'll publish it now.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 09-09-2025 à 22:58:45 (S | E)
Hello dears,

ANSWER C: Here we are: back to school!

2) What is your BEST (or your worst) memory of school?

When I was thirteen years old, at the start of the school year, our maths teacher told us : « Mathematics are a little game
and, throughout this year, I w'll prove it to you. « Actually, his method was so lively and so efficient that, this year, we
all had fun learning algebra and geometry. Not only, did I discover that math could really be a little game, but I also
understood that I could do it and succeed. This is really my best memory of school.


Obligés de raccourcir la durée des indications... Disons le 10 en bleu et 11 et 12 en vert...
de votre aide à tous!

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 10-09-2025 à 17:13:33 (S | E)
Hello!

Here we are: back to school!

2) What is your BEST (or your worst) memory of school?

When I was thirteen years old, at the start of the school year, our maths teacher told us : « Mathematics are a little game
and, throughout this year, I w'll prove it to you. « Actually, his method was so lively and so efficient that, this year, we
all had fun learning algebra and geometry. Not only comma or not?, did I discover that math could really be a little game, but I also
understood that I could do it and succeed. This is really my best memory of school.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de alouettelulu, postée le 11-09-2025 à 12:06:05 (S | E)
Merci, Gerold. Voici mes corrections.

2) What is your BEST (or your worst) memory of school?

When I was thirteen years old, at the start of the school year, our maths (UK) teacher told us : « Mathematics are a little game and, throughout this year, I wi'll prove it to you.» Actually, his method was so lively and so efficient that, this year, we all had fun learning algebra and geometry. Not only did I discover that maths could really be a little game, but I also understood that I could do it and succeed. This is really my best memory of school.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de gerold, postée le 11-09-2025 à 17:06:21 (S | E)
Hello!

2) What is your BEST (or your worst) memory of school?

When I was thirteen years old, at the start of the school year, our maths teacher told us : « Mathematics are a little game and, throughout this year, I will (or I'll) prove it to you.» Actually, his method was so lively and so efficient that, that year, we all had fun learning algebra and geometry. Not only did I discover that maths could really be a little game, but I also understood that I could do it and succeed. This is really my best memory of school.

"Maths" est plutôt anglais, "math" plutôt américain, mais il vaut mieux garder la même forme dans un texte.
This year = l'année en cours

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de alouettelulu, postée le 11-09-2025 à 19:06:53 (S | E)
2) What is your BEST (or your worst) memory of school?

When I was thirteen years old, at the start of the school year, our maths teacher told us : « Mathematics are a little game and, throughout this year, I will prove it to you.» Actually, his method was so lively and so efficient that, that year, we all had fun learning algebra and geometry. Not only did I discover that maths could really be a little game, but I also understood that I could do it and succeed. This is really my best memory of school.

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Réponse : Let's suggest 92/ Taking it easy 38 de here4u, postée le 12-09-2025 à 11:29:10 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Final suggestions. Thanks for everyone's help!

ANSWER A:

I was in primary school and must have been about seven years old. My teacher was known to be strict. But that year, she was pregnant, often tired and irritable, not with most of the pupils, but always with the same little girl, shy, humble, always frightened. The teacher told her off very often and, one day, she grabbed the little girl by her hair and shook her ! I was feeling very, very bad, but I did not say anything, not even to my parents. I have never forgotten that event, which is one of my worst memories of school.


- Très bon usage des modaux et du passif complexe.
- Ne pas oublier la différence entre 'this' proximité spatiale ou temporelle et 'that' eloignement spatial ou temporel. Même chose pour 'this'/ 'that' - here/ there
- most of the pupils/ most pupils: la plupart des élèves
- the teacher told her off: lorsque la particule est un pronom, elle se place après le verbe et sépare donc le 'phrasal verb'. Si le COD est un groupe nominal long, l'ensemble 'verbe+ particule' ne se sépare pas.
- Je n'aime pas trop le 'very, very bad', un peu maladroit. Ici, je préfèrerais 'I was shocked'/ 'outraged' !
That was a very good text, indeed! (with very good suggestions!)


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ANSWER B: Topic 1: Do you like gardening? what do you grow?

I love to stir the soil. When I eat fruits or vegetables, I sow the seeds, or the stones,(1) then I wait for their development. Sometimes nothing grows, (punctuation?)(2) most often I get some small stems that etiolate / wither very quickly. However, comma I also have pleasant surprises, especially I have already harvested tomatoes and even one melon, as well as courgettes and cucumbers. Bien
Another pleasure is creating garden spaces, for example: in a large zinc basin, I put water and a pump to power a fountain and I plant a large variety of flowers around it. B I like to find in flea markets old objects (revoir l'ordre des mots)(3) that I clean (or restore)* to integrate them into floral decorations in order to enhance/ improve a garden corner, a terrace or a balcony.B
I need to have vegetation around me, even on a simple windowsill I always have aromatic plants.
Gardening no comma is a hobby which gives escape and happiness. Every morning I come to say hello to my plants and when I notice that they have grown overnight, my day starts well.

* I think that "renovate" ("to repair and improve something, especially a building", Cambridge dictionary) did not suit here.

- 'etiolate'est le terme qui serait dans un livre de botanique. 'wither' est plus usuel.
(1) sow the seeds and the stones: est maladroit. Sow the seeds: OK ! mais on ne sème pas de noyaux...on les 'plante' ou 'enfoui'. Il existe 'kernel' qui exprime aussi le noyau de façon plus spécifique. Plant the stones/ kernels.
(2) Ici, je mettrais un ;
(3) I like to find... un verbe est toujours suivi de son COD, qui a priorité sur les compléments circonstanciels.

This is a very good text, indeed! and for your help, gerold!

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ANSWER C: We're back to school!
2) What is your BEST (or your worst) memory of school?


When I was thirteen years old, at the start of the school year, our maths teacher told us : « Mathematics are a little game and, throughout this year, I will prove it to you.» Actually, his method was so lively and so efficient that, (in) that year (just to avoid the close repetition/ juxtaposition of 'that'), we all had fun learning algebra and geometry. Not only did I discover that maths could really be a little game, but I also understood that I could do it and succeed. This is really my best memory of school.

Peu d'erreurs, faciles à corriger. Un bon texte par ailleurs !

- Math (US)/ maths (GB): mathematics. Attention maths (les Maths en général) est toujours suivi d’un verbe au singulier. Maths is a little game.
Lien internet
'Generally speaking, if you are referring to a unified whole or a single thing, use the singular verb form. If you are talking about particular objects or subdivisions of a subject, use the plural form.' (see examples in the link)

- Différence entre ‘efficient’ et ‘effective’: Efficient and effective are both adjectives.
'efficient' is used to describe something or someone that works in a quick and organised way: I have always known James to be highly competent and efficient in all aspects of his job.
'effective' is used to describe something that gives you the results you want: Taking this tablet is a very effective cure for travel sickness.

BRAVO aux rédacteurs et correcteurs ! C'est un travail très bien mené et efficace. Si vous le sentez nécessaire, n'hésitez pas à nous soumettre tout texte corrigé ou phrase reprise.
Un grand de ce travail.

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