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Message de english92 posté le 07-02-2009 à 15:36:32 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous !
Voila j'ai une lettre à écrire et j'aimerai qu'on me corrige les fautes d'orthographes s'il-vous plait

Dear Vladimir,
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all, was nightmarish over there. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country. As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there, I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.
However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding. The life is very different from Poland because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time, I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate, know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing you.
Your best friend
Seymour
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Modifié par english92 le 07-02-2009 16:44
Réponse: Correction de lettre anglais- de linsey34, postée le 07-02-2009 à 17:51:14 (S | E)
En rouge les erreurs à corriger:
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all, sujet? was nightmarish over there. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country. As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there, I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.
However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding. The life is very different from Poland because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time, I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate, know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing you.
Réponse: Correction de lettre anglais- de khalid1970, postée le 07-02-2009 à 22:53:43 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Dear Vladimir,
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all,sujet was nightmarish over there. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country( Il serait préferable de mentionner le pays). As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there( There un peu superflu), I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.
However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding Cette partie est à revoir. The life is very different from Poland( implicitement on compare la vie dans les deux pays et non la vie et l'Amérique; cela se comprend, mais grammaticalement ce n'est pas très juste) because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time ( a revoir), I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate,sujet know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing il manque une préposition you.
Your best friend
Good luck
Réponse: Correction de lettre anglais- de azer3, postée le 08-02-2009 à 17:32:52 (S | E)
Bonjour,
What an eventful experience I had! I have to speak
 to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all, was nightmarish over there
 to you about my new life and about what happened at Ellis-Island. First of all, was nightmarish over there . My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming
. My father, like the other immigrants, had to answer many questions coming from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter
 from officers as well as to pass a medical examination to be allowed to enter the country. As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered
 the country. As for me, the doctor examined me and he discovered I had a cold. He thus
 I had a cold. He thus said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there, I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter
 said to me that I couldn't leave with my father. At that moment there, I cried and begged because I was terrified to be all alone in this strange place. When I felt better, I was allowed to enter America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.
 America. On the whole, I felt sad to stay on Ellis Island.However, I don't regret my new life in New-York. There are so many foreigners here and New-york
 it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding. The life is very different from Poland because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time
 it's known for the most famous skyscrapers which are in Manhattan as the Empire State Bulding. The life is very different from Poland because American is a land of opportunity that's why I want to start from scratch here. There isn't very for a long time , I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate, know
, I sang in a temple. At that moment, I felt a rush of joy. I hope to scratch a living and fulfil a dream. At any rate, know that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing you.
 that I don't forget you. I'm looking forward to hearing you. on dit pas speak to you c'est une lettre est n'ont pas une conversation orale
on dit pas speak to you c'est une lettre est n'ont pas une conversation orale le sujet est mal placé
le sujet est mal placé on dit pas comming tu dois changer toute la phrase de point de vue construction
on dit pas comming tu dois changer toute la phrase de point de vue construction to enter...ça manque une proposition
to enter...ça manque une proposition discovered...ca maque quelque chose
discovered...ca maque quelque chose ça manque une proposition
ça manque une proposition ou le majuscule pour la deuxième partie de mot
ou le majuscule pour la deuxième partie de mot là j'ai pas compris
là j'ai pas compris  je tu propose "be sure that"...
je tu propose "be sure that"...Voilà corriges-toi à la lumière de tous les corrections proposés.
Bon chance.













 
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