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Message de fragman posté le 31-01-2012 à 16:27:39 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je voudrais partir aux EU et pour cela je dois faire une lettre de présentation pour ma future famille d’accueil ! Pourriez-vous m'aider à la corriger, merci infiniment pour vos réponses !
(Elle n'est pas totalement finie)
Dear Host family,
Well, it has been over a year that I think about this project and now I decided to want to achieve it. What for ? In order to discover american society, to improve my English skills and to meet people.
I live in Nancy, in the area of the Lorraine, it’s a city located in the North/East part of France, near to Germany, Luxembourg and Switzerland. I live there since I was born with my family, that is to say my father J*********, my mother M********** and my sister L***** who is 19. Without forgetting our rabbit !
The 22nd May, I will be 17. I am of average height. I have got hazel eyes and brown hair. I am friendly, sociable, helpful, but also […..]
I am studying in the high school next door to me, her name is F******* C****. I am currently in the class that equals the 11th grade. I chose a scientific class and I project to work in the field of architecture, astronomy or physics.
I pratice tennis three times a week and also handball since two years. I enjoy to go skiing in the Alps during the winter. I practiced judo during eleven years. But nowadays, I’m really interested in kitesurfing.
I like goint out with my friends, to go to the movies ........
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Modifié par lucile83 le 31-01-2012 17:46
Message de fragman posté le 31-01-2012 à 16:27:39 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je voudrais partir aux EU et pour cela je dois faire une lettre de présentation pour ma future famille d’accueil ! Pourriez-vous m'aider à la corriger, merci infiniment pour vos réponses !
(Elle n'est pas totalement finie)
Dear Host family,
Well, it has been over a year that I think about this project and now I decided to want to achieve it. What for ? In order to discover american society, to improve my English skills and to meet people.
I live in Nancy, in the area of the Lorraine, it’s a city located in the North/East part of France, near to Germany, Luxembourg and Switzerland. I live there since I was born with my family, that is to say my father J*********, my mother M********** and my sister L***** who is 19. Without forgetting our rabbit !
The 22nd May, I will be 17. I am of average height. I have got hazel eyes and brown hair. I am friendly, sociable, helpful, but also […..]
I am studying in the high school next door to me, her name is F******* C****. I am currently in the class that equals the 11th grade. I chose a scientific class and I project to work in the field of architecture, astronomy or physics.
I pratice tennis three times a week and also handball since two years. I enjoy to go skiing in the Alps during the winter. I practiced judo during eleven years. But nowadays, I’m really interested in kitesurfing.
I like goint out with my friends, to go to the movies ........
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Modifié par lucile83 le 31-01-2012 17:46
Réponse: Correction/Lettre Présentation de sherry48, postée le 06-02-2012 à 00:22:20 (S | E)
Hello fragman.
Here are some areas that you can improve. See what you can do, and if you need help deciding what the mistake is, just ask. If I don't respond quickly, it's because I can no longer receive messages to follow forum replies.
Dear Host family,
Well, it has been over a year that I think about this project and now I decided to want to achieve it. What for ? In order to discover american society, to improve my English skills and to meet people.
I live in Nancy, in the area of the Lorraine, it’s a city located in the North/East part of France, near to Germany, Luxembourg and Switzerland. I live there since I was born with my family, that is to say my father J*********, my mother M********** and my sister L***** who is 19. Without forgetting our rabbit !
The 22nd May, I will be 17. I am of average height. I have got hazel eyes and brown hair. I am friendly, sociable, helpful, but also […..]
I am studying in the high school next door to me, her name is F******* C****. I am currently in the class that equals the 11th grade. I chose a scientific class and I project to work in the field of architecture, astronomy or physics.
I pratice tennis three times a week and also handball since two years. I enjoy to go skiing in the Alps during the winter. I practiced judo during eleven years. But nowadays, I’m really interested in kitesurfing.
I like goint out with my friends, to go to the movies ........
Bon courage! Sherry
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