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Message de lapetitedodo posté le 28-05-2008 à 21:13:46 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir! Demain j'ai mon oral anglais.Je suis en Bep.Ma prof m'a dit de lui faire une présentation sur moi,je lui est donner mais elle me la jamais rendu.Donc je voudrais savoir si quelqu'un pourrais avoir le temps de me corriger mon texte: Hello. My name is Doriane. I am 17 years old and I am in terminal Bep.I live in a house to Châlons with my parents and my brother but I am more often at my boyfriend.During my 2 years I made 3 training courses. The one that I preferred is with the children. On the other hand I hated that has the hopital.After my bep I would like making a BAC then entering the IRTS in Reims to work with the teenagers.My dream would be to work in a home of the childhood.Otherwise except for the studies I like listening to the music and the cinema. My favorite film it is the Chorus-singers because I find that the actors sings really well.For the music I like listened to Céline Dion and Mylène Farmer. Merci d'avance
Réponse: correction oral de hoger, postée le 28-05-2008 à 22:03:22 (S | E)
Hello. My name is Doriane. I am 17 years old and I am in terminal Bep [I'm not familiar with your school system, so I don't know which term to use here]. I live in a house to [wrong preposition!] Châlons with my parents and my brother but I am more often at my boyfriend's. During my 2 years [which two years?] I made [find a better expression] 3 training courses. The one that I preferred is with the children [which children?]. On the other hand [does not make sense, leave it out] I hated that has the hospital [I don't understand this]. After my bep I would like making [wrong form; "I would like" + "to" + infinitive] a BAC [maybe "highschool exam"?] then entering [wrong form; better than "to enter": "to go to"] the IRTS in Reims to work with the [which ones?—if you speak in general, don't use an article] teenagers. My dream would be to work in a home of the childhood [a home for children? an orphanage?]. Otherwise
Réponse: correction oral de lapetitedodo, postée le 29-05-2008 à 06:17:44 (S | E)
Thank you very much