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Message de mariinee posté le 08-02-2009 à 14:56:17 (S | E | F)
J'ai rédigé une rédaction à propos de la place que la télévision occupe de nos jours. Pouvez-vous m'indiquer mes erreurs et me donner quelques idées si cela est possible ! Merci d'avance
Nowadays, the progress and all technology improve us life ; The internet, computer engineering, cellular phone, Audio walkman and especially the Television set.
Almost people have a television in them house. There are multiple type of television : several colours, size of screen …; for all family and income.
What are the habits of there viewer ? And what are the good and bad sides of TV ?
By one survey, 98 % of household own a television. Some families have several televison in them house.
When they eat, they often look a TV set. All programme for all people : The news, documentary, sport broadcast, The weather forecast, variety show, serial, quiz show, television film, cartoon. There are many choices. It is varied ; educational and recreational. The principal addicted are the children : They envoy gathering around a screen TV and watch all the program : they are engross by this new technology. When they are alone, they are like glued to the TV. They are living in a daze.
And the parent don’t always understand.
When it’s winter, the audience share are more well brought up, because when people are in holidays, they have more some free time and go in holidays, without television. But the Main channels earn them living thanks to the commercial break and pay-per-view television.
The only channel’s envie is hold the audience. They don’t mine about the addictive and TV addict they do. Some programme are stultifying for the children, as soon as they get back from school, they go to the TV and are brainwashed by the bad program. Because, in this program, there is never self-censorship. In my opinion, the program like documentary or news are something good. But the reality show or adults show are dangerous for children’s education. I wish it was not subject to censorship for them. There are a stupid show, like a “Catch”, when a brother fight with his father, or like “brother” when a people are manipulate and show in front of all world. They have the right to privacy and make a fool of them self.
The TV entertain, but it’s can become violent and dangerous.
So, the TV have a good and bad sides. It’s can be dangerous, or recreational.
We must be suspicious and open us eyes ; the reality isn’t what the television is. Several people have make-believe.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-02-2009 15:07
Message de mariinee posté le 08-02-2009 à 14:56:17 (S | E | F)
J'ai rédigé une rédaction à propos de la place que la télévision occupe de nos jours. Pouvez-vous m'indiquer mes erreurs et me donner quelques idées si cela est possible ! Merci d'avance
Nowadays, the progress and all technology improve us life ; The internet, computer engineering, cellular phone, Audio walkman and especially the Television set.
Almost people have a television in them house. There are multiple type of television : several colours, size of screen …; for all family and income.
What are the habits of there viewer ? And what are the good and bad sides of TV ?
By one survey, 98 % of household own a television. Some families have several televison in them house.
When they eat, they often look a TV set. All programme for all people : The news, documentary, sport broadcast, The weather forecast, variety show, serial, quiz show, television film, cartoon. There are many choices. It is varied ; educational and recreational. The principal addicted are the children : They envoy gathering around a screen TV and watch all the program : they are engross by this new technology. When they are alone, they are like glued to the TV. They are living in a daze.
And the parent don’t always understand.
When it’s winter, the audience share are more well brought up, because when people are in holidays, they have more some free time and go in holidays, without television. But the Main channels earn them living thanks to the commercial break and pay-per-view television.
The only channel’s envie is hold the audience. They don’t mine about the addictive and TV addict they do. Some programme are stultifying for the children, as soon as they get back from school, they go to the TV and are brainwashed by the bad program. Because, in this program, there is never self-censorship. In my opinion, the program like documentary or news are something good. But the reality show or adults show are dangerous for children’s education. I wish it was not subject to censorship for them. There are a stupid show, like a “Catch”, when a brother fight with his father, or like “brother” when a people are manipulate and show in front of all world. They have the right to privacy and make a fool of them self.
The TV entertain, but it’s can become violent and dangerous.
So, the TV have a good and bad sides. It’s can be dangerous, or recreational.
We must be suspicious and open us eyes ; the reality isn’t what the television is. Several people have make-believe.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-02-2009 15:07
Réponse: La place qu'occupe la télévision de laure95, postée le 08-02-2009 à 16:31:36 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici ce que tu dois corriger (en rouge, les erreurs, en vert les commentaires et corrections):
Nowadays,
Almost people have a television in them (même remarque) house. There are multiple type (pluriel) of television : several colours, sizes of screen …; for all family and income.
What are the habits of there viewer ? And what are the good and bad sides of TV ?
By one survey, 98 % of household own a television. Some families have several televison in them house.
When they eat, they often look
And the parent don’t always understand.
When it’s winter, the audience share are more well brought up, because when people are in holiday
The only channel’s envie is to hold the audience. They don’t mine about the addictive and TV addict they do. Some programme are stultifying for the children, as soon as they get back from school, they go to the TV and are brainwashed by the bad program. Because, in this program, there is never self-censorship. In my opinion, the programs like documentary or news are something good. But the reality show or adults show are dangerous for children’s education. I wish it was not subject to censorship for them. There are a stupid show, like a “Catch”, when a brother fight (conjugaison) with his father, or like “brother” when a people are manipulate and show in front of all world. They have the right to privacy and make a fool of them self.
The TV entertain (conjugaison!), but it
So,
We must be suspicious and open us eyes ; the reality isn’t what the television is. Several people have make-believe.
Attention: "a" devant 1 mot singulier, erreurs de conjugaison, confusion pronoms compléments et adjectifs possessifs.
Réponse: La place qu'occupe la télévision de mariinee, postée le 08-02-2009 à 16:58:25 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup !
Quel sont alors les possessifs devant :
Almost people have a television in ? house
[Presque tout le monde a une television chez soi.]
&
Nowadays, progress and all technology improve ? life
..Améliore nos vies
?
Réponse: La place qu'occupe la télévision de laure95, postée le 08-02-2009 à 17:46:19 (S | E)
Je n'ai pas le droit de te donner la réponse. Tape "adjectifs possessifs", et clique sur 1 test avec 1 cours (tu y trouveras la liste). On choisit le possessif en fonction du possesseur et non de l'objet possédé.
Réponse: La place qu'occupe la télévision de mariinee, postée le 09-02-2009 à 20:16:25 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour cette aide Laure95. Je pense avoir compris mes erreurs & autres !
J'ai beaucoup de mal à comprendre la correction de "Hugotachini" .. qui prétend s'appeller John.^^
Bonne soirée à tous.
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