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Fast food / Correction
Message de mia18 posté le 18-03-2009 à 19:38:42 (S | E | F)
Coucou à tous,
Je dois faire une rédaction en anglais, je voudrais savoir est ce que c'est possible que vous me la corrigiez. La voici :
I see more and more reports on television which evoke the topic of fast-food and of the junkfood which develops more and more in the world. Fast-food are places often attended by the young people, they are places in imbalance of healthy food. What brings us to the malbouffe: too fatty food, menus with much of glucids, like too many calories. This food can cause l' obesity, of diabetes, cardiovascular diseases… Me personally, I not go often in fast-foods because I don't have a time and I prefer eat healthily.
Merci
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Modifié par bridg le 18-03-2009 19:39
Message de mia18 posté le 18-03-2009 à 19:38:42 (S | E | F)
Coucou à tous,
Je dois faire une rédaction en anglais, je voudrais savoir est ce que c'est possible que vous me la corrigiez. La voici :
I see more and more reports on television which evoke the topic of fast-food and of the junkfood which develops more and more in the world. Fast-food are places often attended by the young people, they are places in imbalance of healthy food. What brings us to the malbouffe: too fatty food, menus with much of glucids, like too many calories. This food can cause l' obesity, of diabetes, cardiovascular diseases… Me personally, I not go often in fast-foods because I don't have a time and I prefer eat healthily.
Merci
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Modifié par bridg le 18-03-2009 19:39
Réponse: Fast food / Correction de brettdallen, postée le 18-03-2009 à 20:48:15 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Je propose quelques pistes...
I see(d'accord, mais vous pouvez généraliser... "we can see/watch") more and more reports on television which evoke the topic of fast-food and of the(pas nécessaire) junkfood which develops more and more in the world. Fast-food(restaurants! fast food is not a place!) are places often attended by the young people(traduisez: "où les jeunes vont souvent"), they are places in imbalance of healthy food(traduisez: ce que vous pouvez y manger n'est pas souvent/très équilibré"). What brings us to the malbouffe(ça, c'est du français...): too fatty food, menus with much of glucids, like too many calories. This food can cause l' obesity(ne mélangez pas français et anglais), of diabetes, cardiovascular diseases… Me(inutile en anglais) personally, I not go(vérifiez comment on construit une question en anglais) often(à placer ailleurs) in fast-foods(no -S, et pensez à "restaurants") because I don't have a("enough", mais en général on considère qu'aller manger dans des "restaurants" de ce type permet de gagner du temps..) time and I prefer eat("prefer" + Base verbale? non... vérifiez.) healthily.
Il y a du travail, mais le fait d'être arrivé jusqu'ici prouve que vous allez y arriver!
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