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Message de bens94 posté le 06-03-2011 à 16:20:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un devoir d’anglais sur le conditionnel, et j'aimerais bien que quelqu'un essaye de corriger mes fautesS.V.P s'il vous plaît.
Voici la question à laquelle je devais répondre:
If you had an occasion to spend a year in an African country like Fi to teach and help the local population, would you do it?
et voici ma réponse:
If I had an occasion to spend a year in an African country like Fi to teach and help the local population. Firstly, I would go to Ethiopia, because unlike the children of France, the children of Ethiopia are illiterates, so I would teach the reading and the handwriting. Secondly, I would teach the sport of defense, so as to could defend against the aggressor. Thirdly, I would read a novel as soon as a person will want to be amused. Finally, contrary to the France where a person who is critically ill could go to the hospital, in Ethiopia they have not this luck, consequently I would try to treat the person who are sick.
Merci d'avance pour votre aide.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-03-2011 16:22
Message de bens94 posté le 06-03-2011 à 16:20:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai un devoir d’anglais sur le conditionnel, et j'aimerais bien que quelqu'un essaye de corriger mes fautes
Voici la question à laquelle je devais répondre:
If you had an occasion to spend a year in an African country like Fi to teach and help the local population, would you do it?
et voici ma réponse:
If I had an occasion to spend a year in an African country like Fi to teach and help the local population. Firstly, I would go to Ethiopia, because unlike the children of France, the children of Ethiopia are illiterates, so I would teach the reading and the handwriting. Secondly, I would teach the sport of defense, so as to could defend against the aggressor. Thirdly, I would read a novel as soon as a person will want to be amused. Finally, contrary to the France where a person who is critically ill could go to the hospital, in Ethiopia they have not this luck, consequently I would try to treat the person who are sick.
Merci d'avance pour votre aide.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-03-2011 16:22
Réponse: Conditionnel/ correction de laure95, postée le 06-03-2011 à 18:13:10 (S | E)
Bonsoir, voici ce que tu dois corriger:
If I had an occasion to spend a year in an African country like Fi to teach and help the local population. (pourquoi un point?, tu as commencé une phrase donc tu dois la terminer) Firstly, I would go to Ethiopia, because unlike the children of (pas la bonne préposition) France,
Réponse: Conditionnel/ correction de bens94, postée le 06-03-2011 à 19:40:23 (S | E)
voici la correction, j’espère qu'il y a moins de faute cette fois-ci, et merci pour m'avoir aider.
If I had an occasion to spend a year in an African country like Fi to teach and help the local population, firstly, I would go to Ethiopia, because unlike a France children , a Ethiopia children are illiterate, so I would teach reading and handwriting. Secondly, I would teach a sport of defense, so as to (eux la je vois pas elle est ou la faute, ca veux bien dire “de facon à”) could defend themselves against the aggressor. Thirdly, I would read a novel as soon as a person will want to be amused. Finally, contrary to France where a person who is critically ill could go to a hospital, in Ethiopia they are not lucky , consequently I would try to treat the persons who are sick.
Réponse: Conditionnel/ correction de headway, postée le 06-03-2011 à 19:54:41 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
I'm not familiar with "sport of defense"; would 'combat sport' be correct in the present context?
Regards.
Headway.
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Modifié par headway le 06-03-2011 19:55
I would teach them how to read and spell/write*
Réponse: Conditionnel/ correction de bens94, postée le 06-03-2011 à 20:22:51 (S | E)
OK, merci pour cette correction et j'ai une autre question pour le "so as to" qui veut dire de façon à,es-ce-que vous pouvez m'expliquer où est l'erreur car laure95 m'a dit que c’était et je n'ai pas compris pourquoi ça l’était.
Réponse: Conditionnel/ correction de headway, postée le 06-03-2011 à 20:35:03 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
dans votre phrase, je dirais simplement: so they could protect themselves.
Bonne soirée.
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Modifié par headway le 06-03-2011 20:35
So they would be able to protect themselves.
Réponse: Conditionnel/ correction de bens94, postée le 06-03-2011 à 20:44:48 (S | E)
Merci pour cette aide
bonne soirée a vous également
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