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Message de majicb75 posté le 24-01-2013 à 01:19:41 (S | E | F)
Hello
I need your help to improve my writing. I would appreciate if you could correct this text.
Thank you very much.
Game plan
I will inform the parents that their situation has been reported to the Director of Youth Protection.
I will meet the parents and inform them of the content of the report
I will ask them what is their view on the situation
I will ask them how they going to improve the situation
I will meet the child and inform him that his situation has been reported to the Director of Youth Protection.
I will ask him to tell me how his parents threats him
I will ask him if he feels that is safety is at risk
I will contact the school and ask for their observations
I will write an evaluation report for the court
In that report, I will determine if the safety and the development of the child are at risk
I will give my recommendations to the judge.
I will submit my report to the youth court.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-01-2013 08:40
Message de majicb75 posté le 24-01-2013 à 01:19:41 (S | E | F)
Hello
I need your help to improve my writing. I would appreciate if you could correct this text.
Thank you very much.
Game plan
I will inform the parents that their situation has been reported to the Director of Youth Protection.
I will meet the parents and inform them of the content of the report
I will ask them what is their view on the situation
I will ask them how they going to improve the situation
I will meet the child and inform him that his situation has been reported to the Director of Youth Protection.
I will ask him to tell me how his parents threats him
I will ask him if he feels that is safety is at risk
I will contact the school and ask for their observations
I will write an evaluation report for the court
In that report, I will determine if the safety and the development of the child are at risk
I will give my recommendations to the judge.
I will submit my report to the youth court.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-01-2013 08:40
Réponse: Game plan /John's case de princesschenel, postée le 24-01-2013 à 07:04:23 (S | E)
Hello,
You have done a great job. A few of the sentences needed minor corrections, which I have written in red.
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